Down-
Soeun Park
Rain tumbles down
On a mill on a hill
Buckets they fill
Turning grass a muddy brown
Windows close down
As people inside brace for the storm
The clouds outside take on a new form
And everything get quiet all around
Clouds cry down
Some soft and mournful
Some angry and doubtful
Enveloping the sky like a gown
The sea rises up and down
"Crash" go the waves
The ships try to brave
As the storm seeds are sown.
Lightning strikes down
Freely, furiously fast
Like an invincible ships mast
It is the dark sky's crown
The sun shines down
Finally the sky turns light
The storm lost its might
It brings joy to the town
http://www.wordle.net/show/wrdl/2553921/Down
I realy like the fitst stanza, it sort of "skips along". The third stanza has GRRREAT (apoligies to kellogs and tony the tiger) imagrey.
ReplyDeleteI would change the last verse to be about rain because it seems a little off topic compared to the rest of the poem. I think that the grass from green to brown should be reversed or are you taking about mud (?)
1 The rhyme scheme is ABBA.
2 The tone seems dark, but the first verse is sing-song-ey.
3 Like an invincible ship(')s mast, enveloping the sky like a gown,and clouds cry down are all interesting workd choices.
4 Clouds crying down is an example of imagrey
5 Alliteration was used in stanza three, line two.
6 On a mill on a hill is an example of internal rhyme in stanza one line two.
7 Personification is used in verse four line one, snow tiptoes down.
8 Onomatopoeia is used in stanza four line three, "Psst" Christmas time is coming around
Nolan Thompson (who is actully in period 4)
1)The poem its about a heavy storm that is coming and athern comes and then is over.
ReplyDelete2) One question i have is towards the last line of the fourth stanza, i dont really get it...but then again im feeling pretty slow today.
3) Umm i dont really get the point of the fifth stanza, althoug i love the use of imagery in it.
4) One question i had is: Why didn't you describet he actual storm and the rain and how it affected everything, i just feel that having that description would make your poem more alive.
Similes/Metaphors
1. "Enveloping the sky like a gown" Simile
2. "Like an invincible ships mast" Simile
3."It is the dark sky's crown" Metaphor
4. "As the storm seeds are sown." Metaphor
Symbol : "Lighning"- Strong, Powerful, angry, loud, Storm
Sara Berzingi
1.) People awaiting the storm, and bracing against for what it is to come
ReplyDelete2.) Question I have is in the 2nd stanza last line, wouldn't be a more active rather than quiet?
3.) Question I have in stanza 4 is are the people in on a shore line? at first it seemed like they were on a hill
4.) Question I have about the whole poem is that does it have a double meaning or is it just about the strom
4 example or metaphor simile are,
1. Like an invincible ships mast
2. Enveloping the sky like a gown
3. It is the dark sky's crown
4. Storm seeds are sown
Clouds are symbolic
Lightning
Rain
Storms
Shruthi Sreekumar ^
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