MLB Post Season
The world series is near
But like a wild beast do not fear
Because the season is not over
There is still October
Pitches thrown like rockets
Every team has tricks in their pockets
The hitters Smack the ball
The umpire makes the call
The rivalries are flaring
the crowd is blaring
the games are intense
So have a good defense
The pressure is on
So do not scamper like a fawn
Best bring your best stuff
So do not bluff
The better hitter hit a homer
The screaming ball hit a stoner
The end is near but like a mighty bull do not fear
For there is still next year
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-i enjoyed that you wrote about baseball and that you used proper grammer.
ReplyDelete-you should improveon breaking the ruels of poetry and putting more enthusiasum.
1.rhyme scheme-AABB
2.tone-bland
3.diction-october, pockets and fawn
4.imagery-baseball field
5.alliteration-hitter hit a homer: line 13
6.internal rhyme-near and fear: line 15
7.personification-screaming ball:line14
8.onomatopoeia-smack: line 7
jessica field
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ReplyDeleteI like the idea that you used what you liked to write a poem. When you write about what you know, it's interesting. I also like how you rhymed your words.
ReplyDeleteThe poem did not seem to flow very well, and there were many typos.
The rhyme scheme of this poem was A,A,B,B.
The poet's tone was reassuring.
I like your similes of "Like a wild beast","Like a mighty bull", and "like a fawn."
The alliteration used was "The better hitter hit a homer" in line 13.
The internal rhyme used is "The end is near... do not fear" in line 15.
The personification is "the screaming ball" in line 14.
The onomatopoeia is "smack the ball" in line 7.
Kristen Rexroad
I loved the concept of this poem and how you wrote about something you love to play.
ReplyDeleteIf you could improve anything it would be coming up with a better rhyme for homer and add more punctuation to add more of an effect.
rhyme scheme- A, A, B, B
tone- reassuring
diction- scamper because it's a very descriptive word; mighty bull because its's comparing someone to a mighty bull and how they are fearless; wild beast because it's a very vivdly describing word
imagery- "The screaming ball hit a stoner"
alliteration- "The better hitter hit a homer" line 13
internal rhyme- "The end is near but like a mighty bull do not fear" line 15
personification- "The screaming ball hit a stoner" line 14
onomatopoeia- Smack line 7
Abbie Loughry
1) baseball is the contents of the poem
ReplyDelete2) second stanza second the line both teams have tricks in their pockets, i don't understand because there aren't really any plays or tricks in baseball just skill and precision
3) In the first stanza the final two lines do not seem like they would rhyme, they do it just doesn't have the same feel as i thought it would when i read it
4) for the entire poem why is it from a perspective of third person instead of a first person it just strikes me as odd
like a mighty bull
like a wild beast
like a fawn
Robert Dougan