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Thursday, October 7, 2010

Michael period 4

A Cross Country Race
ClIckEty-ClAck Im rIght On trAck
Im rUnnIng LIkE A ChEEtAh
Im In frOnt sO I wOnt hOld bAck
C'mOn I bEt Ill bEAtchA


I wOnt bE bEAt
I hAvE dEtErmInAtIOn
I'm rIght On hIs fEEt
Ill UsE sOmE AccElErAtIOn


I cAn sEE fIrst plAcE
I rUn lIkE A twIstEr
thErE Is nO trAcE
Of thE sEcOnd plAcE whO nOw hAs blIstErs


I hAvE AchIEvEd my gOAl
thE trOphy spEAks tO mE
It sAId tO " stAnd tAll"
As I AccEpt thEE
http://www.wordle.net/show/wrdl/2553953/Poptart

7 comments:

  1. -i really enjoyed your determination that i felt through this poem and how you enjoy running enough to write a poem about it.

    -if i were you i would improve the lettering and rhyming a little more.

    1.Rhyme scheme-ABAB
    2.The poet's tone- determined
    3.Diction-twister, blisters, and beat
    4.imagery-running course
    5.no alliteration
    6.clack and track: line 1
    7.run like a twister: line 10
    8.Cickity Clack : line 1

    Jessica Field

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  2. I love your poem! It is so cute! And I love how you capitalized and then lower cased the letters the way you did. haha. lol!

    amber howdershelt:)

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  3. you poem is realistic and has a jubililant mood


    the capitalization and its a little egocentric

    1) AB AB
    2) happy and triumphant
    3) twister, cheeta, and blisters
    4) the last stanza where the victory is clear
    5) clickety clack
    6) first, clack, track
    7) furious twister
    8) first, clickety clack

    Robert Dougan

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  4. I HATE THE THE WAY YOU WROTE IT!!!!

    i love youuu! :) -anonymous

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  5. 1. This poem is about cross country.

    2. One question I have about line 10, is how are you running like a twister? Twisters twist and go all over the place. haha

    3. One question I have about the 2nd stanza is why is the font different from the other stanza's font?

    4. One question I have about the entire poem is, why are the letters all messed up? It looks amazing but I was jw.

    5. 4 examples of 4 similes and/or metaphors are...
    -I'm running like a cheetah
    -I run like a twister
    OMG Michael you only have 2!!!!!

    6. The cheetah makes me think of the wild and running really fast trying to get away from your enemy.

    Kelsey Zuchowski! (:

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  6. The trophy like gold speaks to me is a simile you could have used instead of "The trophy speaks to me"

    Kelsey Zuchowski again ((((: <3

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