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The Harvest Moon Festival, time to pick up the scythe
The moon and the earth are caught in a push-and-shove
Heartbeats pound like percussion to the music of life
A song that flies higher than the moon above
Lanterns with prayers and wishes tied fast to their ends
Bobbing softly on waves of wind swift as the ocean
They pry open your chest and steal all your breath
In kaleidoscope colors and continuous motion
Different people of conflicting language and race
It seems the distance becomes nonexistent.
What about culture, opinion, social class and race?
For one night only, there is no difference.
Costumed dragons and demons weave through the air
One of them winks and shakes hands with me
Boom! Streamers and poppers go flying everywhere
I jump and run through the streets, surrounded by beauty
I eat mooncakes with strangers without any danger
and laugh with my enemies and let my thoughts stray
To last year, to next year, to the endurance of nature
And tomorrow seems more than a mere day away.
I enjoyed the fact that it gave insight into a different culture. I also liked how festive the poem is.
ReplyDeleteThe only suggestions I have are that you misspelled one or two words but that is only human nature. The content is all very good so I have no suggestions there.
1 ABAB CDCD EFEF etc.
2 The tone is happy and carefree
3 She spoke of a kaleidoscope of color, a push and shove cycle, and she compares heartbeats to drum beats.
4 Kaleidoscope of color
5 dragons and demons
6 strangers and danger-first line fourth stanza
7 "The moon and the earth are caught in a push-and-shove" -first stanza second line
8 boom -4th stanza third line.
Will Andrews
This poem is beautiful-- both the images and the overall concept behind it. My favorite line: "I eat mooncakes with strangers without any danger." Reading this poem makes me want to be part of the festival.
ReplyDeleteDr. Benson
If not obvious enough, this poem is about a grand festival of many different backgrounds comeing together to have a fine time in celebration.
ReplyDeleteQuestion 2: "I eat mooncakes with strangers without any danger" What exactly IS a mooncake? Doesn't it have cream in it, or something?
Question 3: "Different people of conflicting language and race
It seems the distance becomes nonexistent.
What about culture, opinion, social class and race?
For one night only, there is no difference." Do you strive for eternal harmony yourself?
Question 4: How many Haverst Moon Festivals have you been to, and when was your last one?
Example 1: "The moon and the earth are caught in a push-and-shove"
Example 2: "A song that flies higher than the moon above"
Example 3: "They pry open your chest and steal all your breath"
Example 4: "In kaleidoscope colors and continuous motion"
When you said "kaleidoscope" I couldn't help but remember the time when I first found one and held it up to my eye, and was amazed with all the colors.
..The above comment was made by Adyline. She did not remember to include this information, and she apologizes.
ReplyDeleteI liked the general happiness of the poem and how it desribed equality.
ReplyDeleteThere are a couple typos, but other than that, it was perfect.
1. ABAB CDCD EFEF......
2. The tone is positive and cheerful
3. She talked of a kaleidoscopes of color, she compares heartbeats to percussion, and she spoke of mooncakes
4. heartbeats pound
5. Costumed dragons and demons weave through the air line 13
6. I eat mooncakes with strangers without any danger line 17
7. The moon and the earth are caught in a push-and-shove line 2
8. boom line 15
Lucas Vealey
1) This poem is about the Harvest Moon Festival and how wonderful it is to those who attend
ReplyDelete2) I liked Line 18 ("and laugh with my enemies and let my thoughts stray") because it shows how this festival unifies all that go to it.
3) I particularly enjoyed the third stanza, because like Line 18 it tells how all the people of China who come are unified by the festival.
4) My question is how does the festival stanza relate to music? The 4th line ("A song that flies higher than the moon above") and the 3rd line ("Heartbeats pound like percussion to the music of life") both refer to music, right?
Culture - festivals, parties, religions, races, dances, fun, responsibilities, countries, ideals