Mirror, mirror on the wall
I may not be the fairest of them all
Yet you tell me in your own way
That my smile is as bright as day
Mirror, mirror on the wall
Tell me what I'll wear next fall,
Shall I buy that big, bright tote?
Or wear my dim dull coat?
Mirror, mirror on the wall
How will I look for the ball?
Beautiful like a waterfall?
Or as daintly as a porceiain doll?
Mirror, mirror show me how
To make my look stand out like Pow!
Make me look like the dove that I love
Make me shine like the sun above
Mirror. mirror listen to me
You are the big, blue sea
That I look into to tell me how
How beautiful I look now.
I really enjoyed your use of imagery and ryhme scheme. Some improvements could be adding more alliteration and metaphors.
ReplyDelete1) AABB CCDD EEEE FFGG HIHH
2) enthusiastic
3) bright, porcelian, waterfall
4) Beautiful like a waterfall
5) big blue, line 2; stanza 5
6) Make me look like the dove that I love, line 3; stanza 4
7) Mirror, Mirror show me how, line 1; stanza 4
8) Pow! line 2; stanza 4
Allison Lynch
I enjoyed reading the similes and metaphors in your poem. Everything went well together and your poem flowed.
ReplyDeleteI think you should use more personifications in your next poem. I really liked your uses of similes and metahpors and I think you should continue using those.
1) AABB AACC AAAA DDEE FGGG
2) dramatic
3) love and above, tote and coat, and how you used mirror, mirror at the beginning of each stanza
4)how beautiful I look now
5)big blue; 5th stanza, 2nd line
6)How beautiful I look now; 4th line
7)tell me what I'll wear next fall; 2nd stanza 2nd line
8)Pow; 4th stanza, 2nd line
Maria Williams
1.The poem is about how the writter feels about herself.
ReplyDelete2. One question I have for a particular line of the poem is why does the first line say "Mirror, mirror on the mall"?
3. One question I have about a particular stanza of the poem is in stanza 5 why do you compare the mirror to the sea?
4. One question I have abou the entire poem is why are you so concerned with what this mirror tells you?
-Similies/Metaphors
1)Make me smile like the sun above
2)beautiful like a waterfall
3)My smile is as bright as day
4)Make me look like the dove that I love
Mirror- reflection, Snow White, bathroom, lokking in to water, lokking into yourself.
Maggie Snively