The only time you can roam free from reign,
Dreams are always void of pain.
Anything is possible; limits go beyond the sky.
Authority disregarded, new realms uncharted; here laws don't apply.
Where anything you please can be done,
Where any heart you desire can ultimately be won,
Where facts and science don't always hold true:
In dreams, there is only one being in control: you.
Dreams are never unpleasant, then they'd be nightmares.
Genuine fantasies don't contain frights, sadness, or scares.
Your wildest ideas will blossom and bloom.
You'll forget about the greys of life and its gloom.
A hazy heaven that kisses hate, harm, and heartbreak goodbye,
Favorite visions sprout wings and fly.
Troubles are as significant as dead ants on the ground.
Sweet visions are interrupted by a deafening sound.
"Beep, buzz!" the alarm cries out.
Like a morning rooster, it continues its shout.
The sun is a golden grin in the clouds,
Sharing its rays, shining proud.
Your dreams have now ended,
Though their duration was splendid.
You rise from your bed like the laziest cat.
Dream time will arrive again and you know exactly that.
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The two aspects i enjoyed about your poem the most are probably the fact that you used great imagery and word choice! One thing that you may want to consider is using a different word besides "where" in the second stanza, even though it does tie eerything together...but still. Also, try and enhance the meaning.
ReplyDelete1) A,A,B,B
2) An excitment for the truth of dreams
3) You used terms like deafening, Splendid, and uncharted.
4)When you described the visions as spouting wings
5) hazey heaven and also hate harm and heartbreak. This was all on the 3rd line.
6) It was used in the fourth line "Authority disregarded, new realms uncharted
7) Personification was represented when you said the alarm was crying out on line 18.
8) It was used when you said "Beep, Buzz" on the 17th line.
Sara Berzingi
I really liked that your poem was surreal and very flowing. Only problems I could find is that there are a few spelling a punctation errors.
ReplyDelete1. AABB
2.wistful, dreaming
3. "Your wildest ideas will blossom and bloom" and "Troubles are as significant as dead ants on the ground." and "Your wildest ideas will blossom and bloom."
4."You rise from your bed like the laziest cat."
5."A hazy heaven that kisses hate, harm, and heartbreak goodbye"
6. "Authority disregarded, new realms uncharted, here laws don't apply." line 4
7. "Beep, buzz!" the alarm cries out" line 20
8. ""Beep, buzz!" the alarm cries out" line 20
Evan
1) The poem is about dreams.
ReplyDelete2) What do you mean by '...A hazy heaven that kisses hate, harm, and heartbreak goodbye..."
3) How did you you think of something as profound as this in such a little way?
4) Why did you decide to write about something as simple as dreams when this is such a common topic among poems?
You rise from your bed like the laziest cat.
The sun is a golden grin in the clouds
Like a morning rooster
Troubles are as significant as dead ants on the ground
Fantasies - dreams, life, imagine, clouds.
Jessica H.
1)The poem is about dreaming
ReplyDelete2)What are you saying whenever you say, 'Troubles are as significant as dead ants on the ground.'?
3)What ideas or emotions influenced the first stanza?
4)What type of emotions are trying to flow through the poem, that will speak to the audience?
-You rise from your bed like the laziest cat.
-The sun is a golden grin in the clouds
-Like a morning rooster
-Troubles are as significant as dead ants on the ground
nightmares: darkness, shadows, scary, ominous, terrifying
Tanner Cain