Standing on the field in the hot sunlight,
being in the uniforms is a hard fight.
Sweating like a pig on a barbecue pit,
looking at the bars for the right notes to hit.
Even though drumline is rough and tough,
I like playing bells that I love so much.
You start to mark time to the drumline beat,
when you listen...it sounds so neat!
Just listen to us play,
stay out of the way.
We'll step on your feet,
if you're down on the street.
Watch our mallets jump on the notes,
as we make smiles on the folks.
Isn't that what band is for...
just having to play 'til we can't anymore?
Rat-a-tat-tat,
listen to that!
The drums sound great,
like birds on a date.
We love to play and play,
like kids on a sunny day.
Stand up tall and clap your hands,
for the Red and Blue Marching Band!
Amber Howdershelt:)
-I enjoyed that the poem is funny. I also enjoyed that it was easy to get into.
ReplyDelete-Make this into the theme for MHS band. Plublish it on Edline.
1) A A B B is the rhyme scheme.
2) The tone is fun and cheerful.
3) Folks, 'til, and neat are interresting uses of diction.
4) "...as we make smiles on the folks." is imagery.
5) "play and play" in line 21 is alliteration.
6) "rough and though" in line 5 is internal ryhme.
7) in line 13 is an example of personification
8) line 17 is the onomatopoeia
Jessica Hall
I really like your rhyme scheme. The words flowed perfectly like a song. I also like your word choice it helps you imagine it and the word you chose to rhyme makes it seem like alittle tune.
ReplyDeleteI think you can imrpove on the last line in the second stanza. Everything is going smoothly and then that line kind of breaks off from the rest. The 4th stanza kind of breaks off from the rest because the rhythm is a little strange there.
1.)A,A,B,B
2.)The tone is hardworking,seems like a herd is coming through, at the end it is like appreciative.
3.)3rd stanza,is the part where it sounds like a herd of animals is coming through, the words you chose were like that and it's really cool. 2nd stanza the words there represent enjoyment. The last stanza, the words there give a tone of being appreciative of the band.
4.) Standing on the field in hot sunlight is imagery
5.) no alliteration
6.)rough and tough in 2nd stanza
7.) mallets jump on the notes, 5th stanza
8.) Rat-a-tat-tat explaining the drum line
Shruthi Sreekumar
1. This poem is about MHS's marching band.
ReplyDelete2. One question I have for line 10 is why would people have to stay out of your way?
3. One question I have about stanza 5 is your similes don't make sense so what are they referring to?
4. One question I have for the entire poem is what is so special about the marching band?
5. Four examples of a simile and/ or metaphor are Sweating like a pig on a barbecue pit, The drums sound great,like birds on a date, We love to play and play,like kids on a sunny day, and I can'y find another one.
6. One allusion I see when I hear uniform is people who look a like and do everything in unison and they are all the same.
^ jessica Field
ReplyDeleteThe poem is about MHS Red and Blue drumline. One question I Have about line 20 is how do the drums sound like birds on a date? I have a question about the 1st stanza, how is being in our uniforms like being pigs in a barbecue pit? And what made you think about writing about the MHS drumline?
ReplyDelete4 examples of similie/metaphor:
line 2 "being in the uniforms is a hard fight" line 3 "Standing like pigs in a barbecue pit"
line 20 "like birds on a date"
line 22 "like kids on a sunny day"
Standing on the field in the hot sunlight- MHS football field. Heat, sunlight, turf, being miserable
Abbie Loughry