Fall
We had our laughs,
And we had our cries.
But fall came like lightning,
And we said our goodbyes.
The cold crept in
like some sort of disease.
No more hiking or biking
And no more buzzing bees.
But now we have jackets
and lots of parades.
Crunching leaves make a racket,
While their colors fade.
Now we're in classes,
and lots of parades.
Crunching leaves make a racket,
While their colors fade.
Now we're in classes,
Just like last spring.
Our minds are like sponges,
Learning new things.
Learning new things.
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ReplyDeleteI really liked the way you were saying goodbye to summer and hello to fall. I loved the whole poem! I would suggest adding more punctuation to the the ends of your lines to make a bigger effect.
ReplyDeleterhyme scheme- was a, b, c, b.
tone- sounded kind of depressed about school starting again and summer leaving and being replaced by fall.
diction- sponges because I don't see too many poems that include the word sponge; disease because it makes the poem sound kind of dark...; and laughs becasue even though disease makes it sound dark, adding laughs makes it sound happy.
imagery- "But fall came like lightning"
alliteration- some sort (line 6)
internal rhyme- hiking or biking (line 7)
personification- cold crept in (line 5)
onomatopoeia- buzzing bees (line 8)
Abbie Loughry
I like the whole poem in genral and I liked how you were saying goodbye to summer and sriing and hllo to fall. I would add more punctuation.
ReplyDeleterhyme scheme was a,b,c,b
tone was a little depreessing
diction was very good and I liked the word choice you used
imagery was "But fall came like lightning
alliteration was some sort (line6)
internial rhyme was hiking or biking(line7)
personiication was cold creptin (line5)
onomatopoeia was buzzing bees
nathan houser
"Our minds are like sponges"-- great line! What if the "we" in the poem was a specific group of people? How would that change what you were saying in the poem?
ReplyDeleteDr. Benson
1. It's about fall.
ReplyDelete2. But fall came like lightning, did you mean did it come fast, or did it leave fast?
3. we had our & we had our cries, was it good or a bad thing?
4. How did you feel when you wrote this poem.
Simile/Metaphors:
-like some sort of disease
-just like last spring
-our minds are like sponges
-but the fall came like lightning
MAkayla Schmidt (:
1)This poem is about the fall season and all of the activities that we do in the fall.
ReplyDelete2) My question about a line is about line 6. How is the cold arriving compared to a disease?
3) My question about a stanza is about stanza 2. Are you referring to the summer?
4)A question I have about the entire poem, is do you like fall? I thought you might like fall because you chose to write a poem about it. But, I also thought you might not like it because of some of the lines in stanza 2.
a)Our minds are like sponges.
b)The cold crept in like some sort of disease.
c) But fall came like lightning.
d)Now we are in calsses just like last spring.
A part of the poem that I thought symbolized somethign was "But fall came like lightning". I think that fall come fast like lightning symbolizes how fast time goes by.
Ashley Schifano! (:
1. This poem is obviously about fall.
ReplyDelete2. What do you mean by the cold came in like a disease? Is it something you dont enjoy?
3. The first stanza; what is it you are talking about ending?
4. Are you positively or neatively portraying fall?
Similes/metaphors- fall came like lightning, the cold crept in liek some sort of disease, our minds are like sponges, just like last spring
I think wind can be symbolic to this poem. Not only is wind a part of fall, but it can represent the coming and going of soemthing or an unseen power.