Guitar
A guitar
could take you far.
It could make you a dollar any day
if you knew how to play
Your fingers fly and you feel fine,
You're almost done, just one more line.
Your guitar, she sings,
hear the twings from the strings
Now that the song is terminated
you're left feeling quite elated.
You're a great musician,
Let's have annother listen.
You shine like a star,
this guitar could take you far.
Think...performing live.
You could be the queen bee of the music hive.
A guitar
could take you far.
It could make you a dollar any day
if you know how to play.
-I like in the last stanza how you compare the music player to a beehive. I also enjoyed how you express the feelings of how a person feels when they are playing the guitar.
ReplyDelete-I think that you need to improve how the poem flows. Maybe switch the ordering of the phrases ad lines around. Also, I think that you should improve punctuation.
1) The rhyme scheme went A, A, B, B.
2) Happy and content. Then sad the song is over, but then happy again when you start playing again.
3) I liked it when you use the phrase "the song is "terminated". It showed that the song was completely over and that people were upset by this fact. The first phrase and first two lines describes how a guitar can take you anywhere you want, and that you can play it anywhere. Another interesting use of diction was the "queen bee". It shows that in the different music catagories, the guitar rules over all.
4) You can imagine a person playing the guitar in different locations. First, you see someone in different parts of the world playing different styles of guitars. Then, you see them in a subway station earning money. Next, you see someone infront of a small audience who are upset when the song is over. Last, you see someone performing on stage with a huge audience.
5) Alliteration was used in the second stanza "Fingers flying, feeling fine"
6)Internal rhyme was used in the last line of the second stanza, "twings" and "strings".
7)The guitar was said to "sing" when someone is playing it. It was shown in the second phrase, third line.
8) Onomatopoeia was used in the second stanza, last line when the strings "twing".
-Soeun Park
Because the poem overall is so strict in its rhythm, it would be fun to have a free verse section in the middle, kind of like when a guitarist starts improvising. Or maybe the rhythm loosens up the longer the poem goes.
ReplyDeleteDr. Benson
1)The poem is about the guitar.
ReplyDelete2)I have a question about the first 2 lines. How come you didn't put it all in one line?
3)I have a question about the 4th stanza. How come you changed the subject from a star to a beehive?
4)I have a question about the poem. Why did you make it about playing the guitar?
Your guitar, she sings, you shine like a star, you could be the queen bee of the music hive, a guitar could take you so far
Guitar- play, music, performing, dollar, listen,
1) this poem is about Nolan's guitar.
ReplyDelete2) Why did you repeat line 2 in line 14.
3) In the fourth stanza why did you empathize think and perform?
4) Is this poem about how you want to become a famous musican?
Fly-New heights, sky, limitless
Abby Foster