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As I travel through the night,
The engine screams but that's all right.
No one around to hear the sound,
So I yell, "look out there's a maniac in town!"
Faster and faster the four wheeler went,
Each crunch from the tire was sure to leave a dent.
The roughness was finally getting to me,
It felt like I had been kicked in the knee.
Slowing down was my best choice,
Since those spider webs were very moist.
It was like having gum stuck in your hair,
Everywhere you went it was still there.
Although the ride was heaven,
I head to be home before eleven.
The sweaty, smelly, slimy grass was no help at all,
Because my four wheeler flipped and it was not a ball.
The piece of junk moved as fast as it could,
It was like a grandmother walking through my neighborhood.
My four wheeler rolled up the hill by our lake,
But I forgot to put on the parking brake.
I thought I had gotten home past my bed time,
To realize it was only nine.
Then I heard a crash from somewhere,
And soon found out the four wheeler needed to be repaired.
a few aspects i liked about this poem was that there was a good rhythme and rhyme scheme i liked this becacause it gave the poem alot of musical quality especically when put together. I would improve on the fact that the poem was a bit off beat and that the rhymes didnt match up during the end. the rhyme scheme was aa bb cc dd ee ff gg hh ii jj kk ll... the tone sort of changed from a fast paced to a slower pace. weaty smelly and slimy was a good choice of diction. pushed up the hill by our lake was a good use of imagaery. wheeler and went was a good use of alliteration on line one of the secaond stanza. around and soun on the third line of the first stanza was a good use of internal rhyme. engine screams was a good use of personification and crunch was a good use of onamatopoeia.
ReplyDelete-garett farmerie
in this poem i really liked that she kept the same topic and didnt change like some people tend to do. i think that this poem could use more elaberate words to make it sound more advanced.
ReplyDelete1) from what i read i dont see a rhyme scheme
2) happy and excited to be out riding
3) "theres a maniac in town" i like the word maniac it ulls together that first stanza
"engine screams" i really like the was she used the engine screamed it makes me picyure a steaming engine and its good.
thats all i can find for diction
4) when she said the engine screams it made me picture a steaming engin in the movie titanic when they r down at the bottom of the ship where they put the coal into the fire
5) in several lines she used the letter I at the begging of the lines like for example in lines 18 and 10 she started thoses lines with I's
6)in line 3 she said "no one around to hear the sound"
7) in line 2 she said the engines scream
8) she said in line 23 "then i heard a crash from somewhere"
Tayler Imes
1)this poem is about riding her fourwheeler and how much she enjoys it
ReplyDelete2)what were you thinking when you wrote faster and faster the four wheeler went?
3)stanza four really popped out so i was wondering why ascossiate heaven witha four wheeler
4)do you really enjoy riding a four wheeler?
5)like having gum stuck in your hair
like a grandmother walking through my neighboorhood
thoses are the only 2 i can find
6)i pictured a four wheeler and it made me think of dirt, helmet, fast, dangerous
Tayler