http://www.wordle.net/show/wrdl/2554714/The_grasp_of_the_dream
There is a world not far from here,
over the sea and away,
the world will catch you in it's grasp
like tides on a stormy day.
Once you enter this magical place,
there is no turning back.
You will stay inside forever,
in the dream world's grasp.
However, staying in a world as this
isn't such a pity.
The wind will whisper through the trees,
like gossip in a city.
The brooks will burble at the sight
of someone new to see,
and like the bubbly birds that bring their buddies,
they must play with you and me.
The strange clitter-clat of the animals at home
brings curiosity and wonder
They bring you forth, and to the north,
to meet their wonderous queen.
As they bring you near,
She meets you with a grin
They encourage you to stay with her
like a mother with her kin.
Alas, you cannot stay
with the children of the land
you must return, and return soon
to the mundane times at hand.
But as the sun begins to set
and day creeps into night,
the people of the dream world remember you
with excitement and delight.
They know you will return some day,
visitors always stay
in the grasp of the dream world,
as I do to this day.
I enjoyed all the imagery of the poem, and the diction.
ReplyDelete1. A, B, C, B, E, F, G, F, H, I, J, I, K, L, M, L, P, Q, R, Q, S, T, U, S
2. Adventurous and imaginative
3. burble, bubbly, delight
4. "over the sea" "through the clouds"
5. "the bubbly birds will bring their buddies"
6. I didn't see any internal rhyme.
7. "wind will whisper through the trees"
8. "burble"?
Willie Beeson
I like how imagery was used throughout the poem and was very descriptive. I like the unusual concept and subject of a dream as the subject of the poem.
ReplyDeleteOne way to improve the poem would be to usea different word instead of place in line one of the second stanza because it was already used in the third line of the first stanza. Another improvement would be to clarigy why staying in the dream world wouldn't be a pity.
1) The rhyme scheme is abcb in all of the stanzas.
2)Mystical, dreamy, wonderment
3)The word burble in line one of the fourth stanza. Grasp in the last line of the third stanza. Gossip in a city on the last line of the third stanza. All are interesting words and not commonly used.
4)Wind will whisper through the trees in line three of the third stanza and bubbly birds illustrates a happy scene in the woods.
5) Wind will whisper in line 3 of the third stanza, bubbly birds in line three of the fourth stanza are examples of alliteration.
6)Internal rhyme is missing in this poem.
7)Brroks will burble gives brooks the human quality of talking. Line one of the fourth stanza.
8)Line one of the fourth stanza uses burble as an onomatopoeia.
Kelly Chen
This was a really, REALLY great poem. It reminded me of a fairytale and I really liked that. To me, the lines were pretty straightforward (I mean, in this imaginative perspective it was) but I do have a question about the second to last stanza. It talks about when the day turns into night and about how you have to leave that world. I'm thinking of the kind of dream when you're asleep, am I thinking of the wrong type of dreaming? And how did you come up with the idea to write about this?
ReplyDelete'Like gossip in a city...' LINE 4 STANZA 3
'Like tides on a stormy day...' LINE 4 STANZA 1
'Like a mother with her kin...' LINE 4 STANZA 6
'The brookes will burble at the sight...' LINE 1 STANZA 4
Amanda
Amanda,
ReplyDeleteYes, it was meant to be like a dream when you're asleep...that's what it meant by the grasp of the dream and alwasy coming back. It's like a re-accuring dream. I came up with writing this by...well, i like to dream. I day dream a lot, but when i sleep i don't remember my dreams. I thinkk that this is what it would be like and the last line refers to my day dreams.
This poem is about a pleasant dream. I feel that I understood the lines in this poem pretty clearly. The stanzas make sense and the lines in the stanzas flow together pretty well. Is this poem based on a certain dream that you have had?
ReplyDelete4 examples of metaphors/similes:
"like tides on a stormy day"
"like gossip in a city"
"like the bubbly birds that bring their buddies"
"like a mother with her kin"
Dreamworld: birds, trees, animals, delight, magic
Allison
I love this poem, Morgan! I would use a smiley here, but we aren't supposed to. Haha...
ReplyDelete1. a dreamlike world.
2. In line 1 of stanza 5, what do you mean by that? If it's about a dream world, are you referencing the home of the dream world? I'm confused.
3. In stanza 8, does the dream world's day correspond to our night? Is this a world accessed by daydreaming or regular dreaming?
4. How did you come up with this topic?
Metaphors/Similes
1. like gossip in a city
2. like tides on a stormy day
3. like a mother with her kin
4. like the bubbly birds that bring their buddies
Allusion
The word magical -- it feels blurry, for some reason, as though I'm not quite awake, and also surreal and even delicate, as though I don't want to disturb it.