school is a doorway to life,
even though you go through much strife.
math, english, and world too can be as boring as molassas
it gets harder and harder as the days flash pass
all of the days that school goes on,
i feel like my mind says dont give out on.
but in the end i know that it will all work out,
as long as my mind stays hard as a rock and doesnt give out.
school is a doorway to life,
even though you endure much strife.
as much sweat and blood that ive gone throught
im satisfed with the road im heading to.
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I liked your poem sbout school. One thing i liked about your poem is how it's true because it does get harder throughout the year. Another thing i liked about your poem is the ending of it because you repeated the first two lines and ended with different ones.Some words are spelled wrong and some of the syllables in the lines don't match up.
ReplyDelete1. The rhyme scheme of the poem is AABB.
2. Some words that desribe your tone are confident and intelligent.
3. Three interesting uses of diction are strife, flash, and endure.
4. One example of imagery was 'school is a doorway to life.
5. There is no use of alliteration in this poem.
Yo Mack man this poem is fly. I liked how it's about life. I also liked the words that you used, like strif.
ReplyDeleteI didn't like how you didnt rhyme in the first stanza and i didn't like how you repeated the first two lines.
1. The rhyme scheme was A, A, B, B.
2. His tone was dreary but with a side of releif.
3. Three interesting uses of diction were strif, endure, and blood.
4. Math, english, and the world can be as boring as dirt in imagery on line 3.
5. He didn't use alliteration in this poem.
6. he didn't use internal rhyme in this poem.
7. My mind says dont give out is personification on line 6.
8. He didn't onomatopoeia in this poem.
Trevor Russell
1. This poem is about pushing through hardships in school to get to a goal.
ReplyDelete2. One question I have for a particular line concerns line four of stanza one ("it gets harder and harder as the days flash pass". What do you find hard in school?
3. One question I have about a particular stanza of the poem is about stanza one. Do you find that school is hard because it is boring, or do you find it boring because it is hard?
4. One question I have about the enitre poem is what is the future goal you are working towards? Does this serve as the motivation for working hard through school?
4 examples of simile/metaphor:
school is a doorway to life
math, english, and world too can be as boring as molassas
as long as my mind stays hard as a rock and doesnt give out
school is a doorway to life (repeated metaphor)
If you were to add another metaphor, maybe change the second repeated "school is a doorway to life" to school cuts like a knife.
Symbols in the Poem
School-hard work, homework, stress, friends, future rewards
Kelly Chen
I like that It's about life and at the same time about school.
ReplyDeleteThe only problem I saw was that you rhymed on with on.
1)AA,BB
2)relieved, tired
3)blood, strife, endure
4)boring as dirt
5)No alliteration
6)No internal rhyme
7)My mind says
8)No use of onomatopoeia
Molly Bragg