Time Turner
Its metal is so very cold
And has such a luminous gold,
With stars so curious
Like a Transformer, your appearance is supurious
It marks the hours, every one
Nor has it yet outrun the sun
Its use and value to you,
Are guaged by what you have to do
It taskes you through time
Suspenceful as a treacherous climb
Just turn or twist it
But only just a bit,
Three turns should do it
You mustn't be seen and must be quick
To save what you crave so dearly
How to help them, they now see clearly
Sand slips away so fast, like a dragon at flight
I wonder if they will be all right
The scene wooshes by as it begins to change
The sensation is so strange
Now they're back at seven thirty
His memory is like a pond, it's murky
In the screaming silence, down to Hagrid's hut they went
To hopefully try and change events.
First off, I enjoyed this little bit here:
ReplyDelete"Sand slips away so fast, like a hippogriff at flight"
because it is really descriptive and gives the reader an idea of the Time Turner's appearance.
I also enjoyed the final stanza:
"Three turns should do it
To save what they crave so dearly
They can't be seen and must be quick
How to help them - they now see clearly."
because it is a clear homage to the Harry Potter series and speaks out to its fans.
I kind of wish that it would be extended further so that those who aren't familiar with the Harry Potter series could understand what the point of the poem was. I also think that it could've been extended to show more detail for the Time Turner - tell the audience what it is exactly, or clarify what it does.
1)ABAB
2)Somewhat dark yet mysterious and magnificent
3)luminous, spurious, sensation
4)"The sensation is so strange"
5)"The sensation is so strange"
6)"To save what they crave so dearly" line 10
7)There were no cases of personificatin. However, you could think of using "It counts the hours slowly"
8)"wooshes" in line 6
Syihan Muhammad
I like the part where you say "Sand slips away so fast, like a hippogriff at flight." I also like that it is about Harry Potter. However, I would like to see more similes or metaphore and personification.
ReplyDelete1. A,B,A,B rhyme scheme.
2. The tone was very mysterious.
3. I enjoyed your choice of adjectives, for example "luminous gold" I also liked the words crave and spurious because they are not commonly used.
4. "And stars so curious"
5."This sensation is so strange." line 8.
6. "To save what they crave so dearly." line 10.
7. This would be a great poem to use more personification, but it is great the way it is.
8. "The scene wooshes by as it begins to change." line 6.
Victoria Sellaro
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1. This poem is about a clock and somebody trying to change time. It also is about Harry Potter but I do not know a lot about Harry Potter so I might sound stupid in this comment.
ReplyDelete2. One question I have for a particular line of this poem is in the 22nd line of the poem. Why was the guys memory murky? Does he not remember what happened when he went back in time?
3. One question I have for a particular stanza of this poem is in the fourth stanza. Why do you have to be quick and why does it matter if anybody sees you.
4. One question I have for the entire poem is why was the person in the poem trying to change time.
Four examples of similes/or metaphores are "Like a Transformer, your appearance is supurious," "Suspenceful as a treacherous climb," "Sand slips away so fast, like a dragon at flight," and "His memory is like a pond, it's murky."
One symbolic part of the poem is when you say "It marks the hours, every one," from this line you can figure out what the object you are talking about is.
When I hear "It marks the hours, every one," I think of a clock, a person changing time, and a person impatently waiting for the time to change.
Victoria Sellaro