Nature is the best of things
Watching birds as they sing
The wind will whisper to the trees
as if someone listens carefully
Nature is the best of things
The changing of leaves, the season it brings
Then the leaves fall on the ground
Like snow whooshing all around
Leaves turn into snow
And then the snow will go
Rain will take its place
Like a flower changing space
Nature is the best of things
Rain, snow, or shine it always brings
A new feeling everyday
As nature changes in every way
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I REALLY enjoyed this poem just as a whole. It was put together extremely well and it was fun to read. But, it was a tiny bit repetitive at times and you could change it up a little bit.
ReplyDelete1) AABB
2) Your tone was very positive and optimistic
3) I like how you wrote the changing of leaves, the season it brings. It reminds me of season changes, which is one of my favorite things ever. I also liked how you didn't always just use nouns, you also used like adjectives and other things. One last thing i liked was how you made the entire poem as a whole a transition.
4) When you said " And then the snow will go, rain will take its place," i pictured the transition from winter to spring.
5) wind will whisper 3rd line
6) snow and go 10th line
7) wind will whisper 3rd line
8) whooshing 8th line
love, MAZIE!<3
-Two aspects of this poem I really enjoyed were her description of nature and the personification she used.
ReplyDelete-Two suggestions for improvement are write more and incorporate more seasons.
1)The rhyme scheme was A, A, B, B.
2)The poet's tone was calm and relaxed.
3)Three interesting uses of diction were whooshing, shine, and space.
4)One example of imagery was "Watching birds as they sing."
5)Alliteration was used with "wind will whisper" in line 3.
6)Internal rhyme was used with "snow" and "go" in line 10.
7)Personification was used with "The wind will whisper to the trees." This was in line 3.
8)Onomatopoeia was used with "whooshing" in line 8.
Elisabeth Schiffbauer
-Two aspects of the poem that I really enjoyed were the rhyme and the fingurative language that was used.
ReplyDelete-Two suggestions for improvement are to make the lines longer and to be more discriptive about the seasons.
1) The rhyme scheme of the poem was A, A, B, B.
2) The poet's tone was ralaxed and happy.
3) Three interesting uses of diction were whoosing, whisper, and shine.
4) One example of imagery in this poem was "Like snow whoosing all around."
5) In this poem, alliteration was used with "will whisper", which was used in line 3.
6) In this poem, internal rhyme was used with "the snow will go", which is used in line 10.
7) In this poem, personification was used with "the wind will whisper to the trees", which is used in line 3.
8) In this poem, onomatopoeia was used with "whoosing", which is in line 8.
Tammy Nguyen
I like nature.
ReplyDeleteI like how it is about the changing seasons.
You repeated a lot.
I don't like the fact that snow is coming in, evil.
1. A,A,B,B
2. Very positive.
3. Leaves turn into- change nature changes-more change shine it brings- even more change.
4. leaves turn into snow
5. wind will whisper. Line 3
6. snow and go. Line 10
7. shine it always brings. Line 14
8. whooshing. Line 8
Bayan Razzaq
1. This poem is about nature.
ReplyDelete2. a question i have for a particular line of the poem is "watching birds as they sing" what are the birds singing?
3. one question i have about a particular stanze is in stanza 1 what is the wind whispering to the trees?
4. A question i have for the entire poem is what is your favorite season?
exanples of similes/metaphors:
natrue is the best of things
like snow wooshing all around
like a flower changing space
as if someone listens carefully
nature- seasone, trees, flowers, wind, rain, snow, green, wood, sun, clouds
Hebah Kassar
1) This poem is about your love of nature and also about the transitions from autumn to winter, and then back to spring.
ReplyDelete2) In line 4, why did you choose to compare the wind whispering to a persons ear? Why not compare it to an animal or something like that?
3) In the last stanza, why did you choose to kind of colclude the poem? Why didn't you make it more suspensful or not so satisfying?
4) What is your favorite season? Because it doesn't seem like you favor one over the others.
Simile/Metaphors:
1. "Like snow whoooshing all around"
2. "Like a flower changing space"
3. " Nature is the best of things"
4. " As if someone is listening carefully"
Symbol:
SNOW- big snow storms, sled-riding, no school
-Mazie!