Leaves of green are no longer found
Magnificent colors fill the hillsides
Leaves dance like butterflies to the ground
They blow across the lawn like an ocean tide
The weather has gotten cold
Tailgating has begun
Its time to cheer on the blue and gold
See if they will pass or run
The wind whispers whoosh like a secret being told
It is blowing, and soon it will be snowing
Holiday plans unfold
Thanksgiving is like the end of season showing
I love the feeling of fall
I love the cool breeze
Fall is the most magical season of all
I love the fantastic colors of the trees
I love the feeling of fall
I love the cool breeze
Fall is the most magical season of all
I love the fantastic colors of the trees
I really enjoyed the descriptive words used. I also enjoyed the way you decribed the season all through out the whole season, not just one day of it. Although this poem was great, if I were to improve anything I would make the second stanza more about the season fall instead of football games. Also, if I had to improve something I would improve the last two lines of the poem, because the rest of it is so good and they are just kind of there.
ReplyDelete1.) abab
2.) the tone is relaxed
3.) "dance like butterflies" was an interesting use of diction because leaves look like butterflies. "Wind whispers whoosh like a secret being told" is an interesting use of diction because not only do you say that the wind whispers,but also that it is likea secret. "Magnificent colors" was an interseting use of diction because you described the colors in a more vibrant word compared to if you would have used something plain like "colorful".
4.) "They blow across the lawn like an ocean tide" was an example of imagery
5.) "wind whispers" line #9
6.) blowing in snowing in line #10
7.) "leaves dance" line #3
8.) "whoosh" line #9
Lindsay Boltralik
-I like stanza two the best beacuse you incorporatds the Mountainers with fall. Also, I like your "leaves dance like butterflies to the ground" its a very good metaphor.
ReplyDelete-My two suggestions would be to in your fist two stanzas have you b lines ryme more. And to use some commas
1.a,b,a,b
2.positive and cheerfull about fall
3.butterflies-i think it describes the falling leaves/tailgating-i like how you incorporated this because it a big part of fall in Morgantown/whispers-you can hear the leaves blowing
4.its time to cheer on the blue and gold
5.wind whispers whoosh line 9
6.blowing and snowing line 10
7.dance like butterflies line 3
8.whoosh line 9
Caitlin Daniels
1)This poem is about fall
ReplyDelete2)One question I have about line 7, does gold and blue mean mountaineers?
3)A question about the last stanza, you were talking about all this fall and winterish, then you go onto I like, why is that?
4)This question is about the whole poem, why did you write about fall?
Similies/metaphors
-Thanksgiving is like the end of season showing
-Leaves dance like butterflies to the ground
-They blow across the lawn like an ocean tide
-The wind whispers whoosh like a secret being told
Fall- orange, jumping, jackets, snow, football, leaves, and trees.
Reuel Zinn
1. This poem is about fall.
ReplyDelete2. One question I have is about line 4, why did you choose to compare blowing leaves to an ocean tide? I thought that sounded more like summer.
3. One question I have is about stanza 5, why did you give your thoughts instead of talking about the actual season like in the other stanzas?
4. One question I have about the entire poem is, is fall your favorite season?
-"Leaves dance like butterflies to the ground"
-"They blow across the lawn like an ocean tide"
-"The wind whispers whoosh like a secret being told"
-"Thanksgiving is like the end of season showing"
Fall- cold, leaves, orange, Thanksgiving, Halloween, pumpkin, piles of leaves, coats
~Kaylee Schmidt
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ReplyDeleteReuel
2. Yes, gold and blue means mountaineers.
3. I did that because i thought that it would be a good ending.
4. I wrote about fall because that is one of the first things that came to my mind, and it is fall season now.
Kaylee
2. I chose to do this because I thought that it would be a good comparison. The tide is strong and the leaves are being blown by a strong wind.
3.I thought that the personal ending would make a better ending.
4. Yes, fall is my favorite season.