My Thoughts as Robert Frost
I walked the path that lay before me,
And wished this were a yellow wood.
I paused to watch a buzzing bee,
That lazily looped the rut where the flowers stood.
I listened to the whispering breeze,
And a bird chirped in a birch nearby.
Dancing light was like a sea,
A shining gem that was a butterfly,
Drifted like a lazy leaf,
On a wind like a shaky breath.
This path was a sheaf**
Of chances, and like a cat they crept.
I drifted along in my sea of thoughts
Contemplating it all.
I thought of all the things time has brought
In the wonder that was soon to be the fall.
**definiton of sheaf: any bundle, cluster or collection
**definiton of sheaf: any bundle, cluster or collection
I really enjoyed how well thought out it was and the way it flowed. I was able to see a vision of the scene and move through out it. Something that was difficult for me was a few of the words, for example sheaf. While it did not change how much i enjoyed the poem, it took more time to try and understand it.
ReplyDelete1. A,B,A,B
2.I saw a hoping and confused tone
3. For diction i noticed how you used lazy leaf, sea of thoughts, and shaky breath. I found this interesting because the adjectives you discribed the scene perfectly.
4. I drifted along in my sea of thoughts
5. "lazy leaf" line 9
6. "bird chirped in a birch" line 6
7. "I listened to the whispering breeze" line 5
8. "buzzing" line 3
Madison Thompson
Jessica, this is some serious stuff! I like it. :) I think that you use awesome vocabulary in your poem. I also think that "Dancing light was like a sea,A shining gem that was a butterfly" was my favorite part. I love butterflies and this made me think of a diamond in my head. It was excellent imagery!:)
ReplyDeleteI honestly don't think that I disliked anything about your poem. It seems to me like you have a lot of experience with writing and it shows!
1. A,B,A,B.
2. Dreamy and in anticipation of fall.
3. Diction- "shaky breath" "lazily looped" and "contemplating".
4. Imagery- Gem that was a butterfly
5. Alliteration- lazily looped the lip (line 4)
6. Internal rhyme- bird chirped in a birch nearby??!
7. Whispering breeze
8. Onomatopoeia- buzzing.
--Cassidy Harris :)
I love your poem, Jesse. I love how it's beautiful, and really flows. Sometimes it's hard to tell what you mean. I don't know what sheaf means. The rhyme scheme was ABAB. The tone was wonder. Three uses of diction was sheaf,crept, and using whispering for breeze. An example of imagery was the light shining on the butterfly. Alitteration was "lasy leaf" in stanza 3 line 1. Another use of it was "chances", "cat", "crept" in stanza 3, line 4. Internal rhyme was used by "chirped" and "birch" in stanza 2 line 2. Personification was used in saying the wind whispered in stanza 2, line 1 and the light danced in stanza 2, line 3.. Otomatopoeia is used by "buzzing bee" in stanza 1 line 4.
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This poem is about the walk of life, how you see the beuty and the danger, and have choices on which way to take but it is ever changing around you as you walk.
ReplyDeleteline four is a little confusing, a bee looped a rut where flowers stood, i have a hard time seeing a bee loop a rut.
stanza four makes me wonder what they are thinking about, contemplating it all, waiting for fall. But why does she look tward the future, why does she contemplate?
The whole poem makes me wonder what the writer and other readers see when she describes the things along the path, are they simply the beuty of the forest or are they parallels for real life things?
The similies and/or metaphors were:
light like a sea
a gem that was a butterfly
a wind like shaky breath
chances, like a cat they crept
a shining gem- glittering, rare, beautiful, hard, valuable, jewelry, facited, and cold