A chill runs down your spine,
The rush crawls through your skin;
You stop on a dime,
Drawing courage from withtin.
The wait seems endless,
It's finally here;
Call upon the restless,
Have no fear.
Give all your strength,
Use all your might;
Go the full length;
Don't lose without a fight.
I enjoy the use of the rhyming words and the picture it shows in my mind. I would improve the length of the poem and the punctuation. 1. ABAB. 2. Motiviational. 3. chill-makes me feel cold inside, rush-sudden burst of energy, restless-can't calm down. 4. You stop on a dime. 5. NA. 6. NA. 7. A chill runs down your spine Line 1. 8. NA.
ReplyDeleteJack Gorski
I like that it is a motavational poem. I also like that it is very relatibale to sports. I would add all the requirments that were not included. I would also make it slightly longer. 1. ABAB 2. trying to motivate 3. crawls makes me think of a parasite in my skin, within could mean several things, courage good describing word 4. chill runs down your spine makes me think of hair standing up on neck 5. NA 6. NA 7. NA 8. NA
ReplyDeleteRiver Hames