Cutting like a knife through the air
Like a little kid at Christmas,
Waiting is more than I can bear
Freshly cut grass, gritty sand;
and the baselines pefectly straight
Sure other sports are okay,
but this one... well it's GREAT
Freshly cut grass, gritty sand;
and the baselines pefectly straight
Sure other sports are okay,
but this one... well it's GREAT
Snap go the balls in leather gloves:
Crack goes the sounds of the bats.
The fence taunting every batter
trying to improve his stats
For many people Summer is spent
splishing, splashing, sunning;
Hazy lazy days flying by
Like an hourglass quickly running
But I look forward to Summer for a
completely different reason;
those days are heaven to me,
because it's finally baseball season
I like his tone and his positive attitude. I like his outlook about baseball as a sport.
ReplyDeleteMaybe a message could improve this poem and also more imagery.
1. ABCB
2. positive
3. days are heaven, cutting like a knife, taunting every batter
4.hazy lazy days
5. splishing, splashing, sunning, line 10
6. hazy lazy days, line 11
7. fence taunting, line 7
8. splishing, line 10
Oliver Lin
Likes
ReplyDelete-I liked all of the poetic devices you used, including metaphors, similes, etc.
-I also enjoyed the commas and other punctuation you used to make it clear how to read the poem.
Improvements
-You should like basketball more then baseball.
1. A B C B
2. Suspenseful, cheerful, excited for baseball sesaon
3. Hazy, taunting, splishing
4. the Hazy, Lazy, sun
5. splishing splashing sunning
6. waiting is "more" then I can "bear"
7. the taunting fence
8. Crack
Daniel Berrebi
THe first thing i enjoyed about Mr. GAllagher's poem is his love and compassion for one of his favorite things to do. NIck's poem is very organized and impressive.
ReplyDeleteI think you should change the subject from baseball to cricket, because cricket is more entertaining. Also baseball players make too much money than they deserve to be.
1. ABCB
2. cheerful, excited for baseball sesaon
3. Hazy, taunting, splishing
4. the Hazy, Lazy, sun
5. splishing splashing sunning
6. more...bear.
7. taunting fence
8. crack
Your friend AKshay Chandran
I enjoyed seeing your love of the sport of baseball and how you wait every year for it.
ReplyDeleteThough baseball is a great game, football is the best. You should also not have such a weird rhyme scheme.
1 ABCB
2. The tone was waiting, looking forward to something
3. Taunting, hazing, and sunning
4. "Snap go the balls in leather gloves" line 1 stanza 2
5. "splishing, splashing, sunning" line 2 stanza 3
6. "Hazy lazy" line 3 stanza 3
7. fence taunting, line 3 stanza 2
8. crack line 2 stanza 2
TJ Haws
The poem is about baseball right?
ReplyDelete"but this one... well it's GREAT" what does that mean?
I don't understand the first stanza, its confusing to me?
why did you name your poem that way?
BEN(IS BETTER THAN OLIVER) HERTZOG WROTE THAT COMMENT
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed how well you rhymed the words and how you show enthusiasm in the poem.
ReplyDelete1. ABCB
2. The tone was excitement
3. Gritty, taunting, bear
4. freshly cut grass
5. like little
6. hazy lazy days Line 15, stanza 4
7. days being like heaven Line 19, stanza 5
8. Crack Line 10, stanza 3
Maria (:
"Like an hourglass","Like a little kid at Christmas ", "Cutting like a knife through the air", "those days are heaven" those are examples of 3 similies and 1 metaphor. Baseball-baseballs, october,bats, gloves, catcher masks, long,summer.
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