It creeps along in the dimming light
For all its prey, a nasty fright
Trodding along the snow so deep
As silent as a mouse, you'd never hear a peep
The snow crunched and crackled beneath the cats claws
His powerful nails as sharp as saws
Patiently waiting for a sign of life
There is no need for strife with teeth like a knife
At last! Prey spotted straight ahead
The mountain goat doesn't know that it soon will be dead
As fast as a chettah, though strong as a leopard
If only that goat hadn't let down his guard...
His crawls to his den with his prize
Mouth filled with delight, victory in the eyes
He dragged his feast back into his lair
And tore a piece off for his two new cubs to share
Two aspects of your poem that I really enjoyed were how well your poem flows and your interesting choice of words.
ReplyDeleteI have no suggestions for you because I think your poem is great as it is.
1. A, A, B, B
2. Your tone was thrilling when you described the leopard going after its prey.
3. The use of the words peep, crackled, and strife
4. "Trodding along the snow so deep"
5. Line 1 of stanza 2, "crunched and crackled beneath the cat's claws"
6. Line 4 of stanza 2, "strife with teeth like a knife"
7. Line 3 of stanza 2, "patiently waiting"
8. Line 1 of stanza 2, "crunched and crackled"
Kaylee Schmidt
Two aspects of the poem I enjoyed were how well the poem flows and the how the poem built up to the end. I don't have any suggestions. 1. AABB
ReplyDelete2. The tone was suspensful 3. Dimming, trodding, and strife 4. "The snow crunched and crackled beneath the cats claws" 5. "The snow crunched and crackled beneath the cats claws" line 1 stanza 2 6. " strife with teeth like a knife" line 4 stanza 2 7. "patiently waiting" line 3 stanza 2 8. "peep" line 4 stanza 1
TJ Haws
Lily I really liked your poem because it really painted a picture of what was happening in the poem in my head. Great job!!!
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ReplyDeleteThis poem is about a snow leopard hunting. One line I have a puestion on is the first line. What path is the leopard creeping on? One stanza I have a question on is the second stanza. How do you konw his teeth and claws are so sharp? My final question is on the entire poem. How do you know that the leopard is hunting and not just looking at the camera? Four examples of a simile are "His powerful nails as sharp as saws," "As silent as a mouse." " teeth like a knife," and "As fast as a chettah." A symbolic word in this poem was knife; brings to mind pain, blood, and killing. Kyle
ReplyDeleteThis poem is about a snow leapord.
ReplyDeleteOne line I have a question on is the first line, who was the leapord creaping on?
Once stanza I have a question on is stanza 1 and i want to know what makes you say its as silent as a mouse when the fight is very nasty?
My question for the entire poem is why did you write about a snow leapord and why did you write about him caughting his prey?
Four examples of a simile are "His powerful nails as sharp as saws," "As silent as a mouse." " teeth like a knife," and "As fast as a chettah."
Prey-food, enemy, and
Emilee Poling