My dog is like my best friend,
His name is Fred.
I tought him to sit
And how to play dead.
He will shake your hand,
If you give him a treat.
A juicy biscuit
Flavored like his favorite meat.
"Bark!" you'll hear,
If Fred isn't fed.
He is a cuddly teddy bear,
And likes to sleep in my bed.
Two aspects of the poem that I really enjoyed were the ineresting rhyme scheme and the and the dog's name. Two suggestions are to not have the poem end so abruptly and also to have abit more transition in the last stanza. 1. ABCB 2. The tone is happy 3. cuddly, Fred, and juicy biscut 4. The second stanza. 5. in the second line of the last stanza. 6. in the second line of the last stanza. 7. there is no personification 8. "Bark." first line of the last stanza
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Two aspects of the poem that I enjoyed were the creative use of a topic that I can easily relate to. I also liked the comparison you made to a "cuddly teddy bear."
ReplyDeleteTwo suggestions I have that could improve your poem are more usage of similes and metaphors. Also, I would try to make each line a little longer.
1) ABCB
2) The poets tone sounds playful and endearing to Fred.
3) Juicy, cuddly, and teddy bear were a few examples of diction in the poem.
4) In the first stanza imagery is created of a dog doing tricks.
5) An an example of alliteration was "if Fred isn't fed."
6) Internal rhyme was used in the second line of the third stanza, "If Fred isn't fed."
7) I was not able to detect any form of personification.
8) Onomatopoeia was used in the first line of the third stanza, "Bark!"
Lily Bailey
I see what Sara means...
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