Beware the Mean Girls
The click-clack of heels like a pendulum,
Time is ticking away from them.
They shall NEVER mature, that is for sure.
They live for gossip, all they want is more.
Giggle, point, stare, and laugh.
They slice our self esteems in half.
Their words spread like disease,
They call them queen bees.
They whine and complain,
Even drive us insane.
Every look's an adventure,
Their teeth look like dentures. :)
Pushing pathetic pupils around,
Their nails say "I'm fake" and fall on the ground.
Skin like porcelain, perfectly held curls,
I will tell you one time.. Beware the mean girls. (it's also a movie!! durr)
Wow. What I like most about this is how true and real it is. I love how you capture the essence of high school hierarchy.
ReplyDeleteImprovement: The meter shifting in a stanza breaks the flow, but it's something we can't live without so don't feel bad. Watch your punctuation, it doesn't match in some places.
1. A,A,B,B
2. It reminds me of the tone the teller of a ghost story my use, but the smile at the end gives it more of a joker's tone.
3. Porcelain, spread like disease, pendulum.
4. "Skin like porcelain, perfectly held curls"
5. "Pushing pathetic pupils" Line 9
6. "Never mature, that is for sure," Line 3
7. People are already personified.
8. "Click-clack" Line 1
Jessica Nelson
-I loved the way you described the mean girl clique all throughout the poem and it gave the perfect image of them! It was really cute and i liked how you didn't do a season like i did, which wasn't as original as yours. ;)
ReplyDelete-For improvements its hard to say because everything you had in there was funny to me. The only thing i would have changed was line 5 because I felt it just sat there.
1. a,a,b,b
2. It reminded me of a scary story warning the adventurers of a beast.
3. "Their nails say I'm fake and fall on the ground" "skin like porcelain" "Perfectly help curls"
4. "Skin like porcelain, perfectly held curls."
5. "Pushing, pathetic, pupils around." line 9
6. "They shall NEVER mature, that is for sure." line 4
7. "Their nails say "I'm fake" and fall to the ground."
8. "click-clack" line 1
Madison Thompson ;)
Cassidy Leanne!! I love this so muchhhh! This is soo true and reall! <3 and since u and julian are obsessed with this movie!
ReplyDeleteimprovement: the punctuation is terrifying other then that there is NOTHING!!!
1. AABB
2. I take it was a jokers tone, it makes me laugh.
3. Porclain, pendulum, and pathetic
4. Tight held curls
5. "Pushing pathetic, pupils"
6. "never mature that is for sure"
7. The nails say "I'm fake"
8. "click- clack"
Katie Ferrebee <3 Ahhhhhhhh i love you babe!! ;))))
i absolutely loved this entire poem!!!!!!!!!!!!
ReplyDeletei think your punctuation can be fixed, but thats all i see thats wrong!
1-AABB
2-the tone of this poem is jokey, it was humorous
3-porcelain, pendelum, pathetic
4-tight held curls
5-pushing pathetic, pupils
6-never mature that is for sure.
7-the nails say im fake
8click-clack
I <3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3<3 youuu!!!! you are the Gretchen of MHS! :) by the way i love your skirt ;) <3...... Julian
1-This poem is about the movie Mean Girls.
ReplyDelete2-I have a question about line 5, what does that stand for?
3-I have a question about stanza 3, are their teeth really fake?
4-One question i have about this entire poem, when can we watch Mean Girls together.
Her similes are:
Their teeth are like dentures.
Skin like porceline.
Words spread like disease.
1) This poem is about the rude popular girls you see at school.
ReplyDelete2) What do you mean when you said that their nails fall to the ground?
3) What does it mean in the first stanza when you claim that time is ticking away from the girls?
4) When you wrote this poem, is there anyone you
were referring to?
Metaphors/Similies-
1)click-clack of heels like a pendulum
2) words spread like disease
3)Skin like porcelain
4) slice our self esteems
fake- lies, un-realistic, fake nails, hair dye, two-faced, backstabber
Maria
1. this poem is about the mean girls that are all about themselves and don't care about anyone else.
ReplyDelete2. Where did you get the "skin like porcelain" that was smart
3. Giggle, point, stare, and laugh.
They slice our self esteems in half.
Their words spread like disease,
They call them queen bees. have you had this happen to you before.
4. Who is this poem about?
Similee/ metaphor
1.Their words spread like disease,
2.Their teeth look like dentures. :)
3.The click-clack of heels like a pendulum,
4. i can't find anohter one.
Mean:
evil, dreadful, brats, snobby.
The movie mean girls.
popular
snobby
all about themselves
i love you Julian!!!!
katie ferrebee
I mean't Cassidy!!
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