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She began at her house, shrugging on a coat
Walking down the road, adventure in her eyes.
The road ended and she stepped into a boat.
She docked the boat at an abandoned moldy house, with a moat.
In a haunted house, that's where she was at,
Many terrifying things popped out: a werewolf, a chainsaw? whats that about?
The chainsaw hummed like a bird, purred like a cat.
Wings fluttered near by like the heart beat of a bat
Suddenly she stared, silent, still.
There was no noise, except for the whoosh of a cape,
Someone was in the room labeled "Will"!
She would be dead if terror could kill.
As stiff as a post,
She silently shifted her feet.
Afraid of seeing what she heard, a ghost!
And this ghost, is what she feared the absolute most.
I enjoyed the rhyming in the poem and the rhythem. You should capitalize at the begining of each line and when you start a new sentence. The rhym scheme was A, B, A, A throughout the whole poem. The tone was haunting. Three interesting uses of diction are that you used the word "stiff" instead of "still", used the word absolute, and you used the word "terror" instead of "fright". One example of imagery was that you described things with simlies and you labled the room. "Suddenly", "silent", and "still" was a use of alliteration. An internal rhyme was "ghost" and "most". Personification was used with the chainsaw humming like a bird and purring like a cat. Onomatopoeia was used with the word "whoosh".
ReplyDeleteLauren Addicks
I really enjoyed the second atnza it was a great way to describe what was going on. Also, i liked how she wrote about a haunted house since we are so close to halloween.
ReplyDeleteI think she could have used some bigger adjectives and also you should capitilize te beggining of each sentance when writing the poem.
1)The rhyme scheme was ABAA.
2)The tone of this poem was dark adn frightful.
3)Three intresting use of diction are how she flowed the adjectives and nouns together. I also liked how she described the haunted house and the words she described it with, it painted a picture in my head.
4)An example of imagery was how you compared and contrasted many of the houses scare tactics.
5)Alliteration was useed in stanza two line one "suddenly she stared, silent, still.
6)Internal rhyme was many things popped out: a werewolf, a chainsaw? whats that about? This was found in stanza one line two.
7)Personification was used in stanza one line three the examople used in this poem is the chainsaw hummed like a bird.
8)Onomatopoeia was used in stanza two line two one example is a whoosh.
Alaine Lambertson
1)This poem is about a haunted house.
ReplyDelete2)Why did you use the word shrugged?
3)One question is why did you make her walk to the haunted house.
4)What made you want to write about this topic?
Four examples are hummed like a bird, purred lika a cat, wimgs fluttered like a beat of a heart, and as stiff as a post.
The adjectives she described about the haunted house were terrifying, chainsaw, werewolf, gohst, and cape clearly describe a haunted house.
Three things that come to mind when i think about a haunted house are cobwebs, boarded up windows, and creaky doors.
that was Alaine Lambertson!!!
ReplyDeleteup there.....
1. Girl going to haunted house.
ReplyDelete2. line 11 Who is Will?
3. last stanza Is Will the ghost?
4. Why would she go to a haunted house by herself
hummed like a bird, purred like a cat, wings fluttered like heart beat of bat, and
Terror- scary things, shocked, terroism