Bad Day
Today has been a very bad day,
but the school caught on fire hooray hooray!
Hopefully tommorrow will be better,
and the weather doesn't get any wetter!
As I waited at the street top,
The bus groweled to a stop.
I just wanted to go home and lay,
because I knew today would be a bad day!
It was raining very hard,
I could see it in the yard.
It was dark as the night
even though it was day light.
My math test was such a fail;
It made me want to wail!
Now I am feeling pale,
Because my mom is going to put me in jail!
I feel like I woke up on the wrong side of the bed,
like the clouds are all around my head.
My day is just getting worse,
As if a witch casted a curse!
Luckily, school ends at noon.
I want to be home very soon!
I wish I could just go to bed,
and start this day all over again.
http://www.wordle.net/show/wrdl/2544419/Zoey%27s_poe
-I liked your choice of rhyming words and I liked how i could picture the bus growling.
ReplyDelete-CAPITILIZE "and" in the 1st stanza, 4th line.
-CAPITILIZE "but" in the 1st stanza, 2nd line and "because" in the 2nd stanza, 4th line.
1.) Your rhyme scheme was A A, B B.
2.) Your tone seems a little gloomy, but then it's happy when you talk about the school being on fire.
3.) Diction- better and wetter, hooray and today, school and mule.
4.) The sound of the bus growling is an example of imagery.
5.) NO ALLITERATION!
6.) Internal Rhyme- "because I knew today would be a bad day!" line 8
7.) Personification- The bus growling. line 6
8.) Onomatopoeia- hooray hooray! line 2
edited by ELAINA SMITH! :)
I enjoyed the school catching on fire and the mule.
ReplyDeleteNo alliteration.
AABB
Very sad and depressing.
Diction-mule, wetter, horray
Imagery-the bus groweled to a stop
Alliteration-there was none
Internal Rhyme-because i knew today would be a bad day (2:4)
Personification-bus groweled (2:2)
Onomatopoeia-horray horray!
Deanna Weimer :)
I thought this poem was really cute and liked the part about the school catching on fire.
ReplyDeleteHowever you need to add an alliteration
1) The rhyme scheme was AABB.
2) Your tone was gloomy, but it was a little happy at parts.
3) Interestin diction was mule, noon, and wetter.
4) Imagery was "and the weather doesn't get any wetter".
5) I did not find any alliteration.
6) I knew today would be a bad day is the internal rhyme in line eight.
7) Personification was the bus growling in line six.
8) An onomatopeia was "hooray hooray!" in line two.
-Rebekah Shephard (:
1) It's about a bad day.
ReplyDelete2) I have no questions about any line.
3) In stanza 4, do you think your mom would really make you go to jail?
4) Why were you having a bad day?
Similes / Metaphors
-It was dark as the night
-like the clouds are all around my head.
-I feel like I woke up on the wrong side of the bed
-As if a witch casted a curse
This poem symbolizes a gray cloud: sad, dreary, gloomy
ELAINA SMITH! :)
1.) This poem is about having a bad day.
ReplyDelete2.) How do the last two lines of the poem rhyme?
3.) No questions about a particular stanza.
4.) How did you come up with stanza 4?
Similies/metaphors:
-It was as dark as the night.
-As if a witch casted a curse.
-I feel like I woke up on the wrong side of the bed
-like the clouds are all around my head
Bad - depressing, not good, upsetting
Deanna(:
yeah my mom would definatly put me in jail. just jokingg :)
ReplyDeletei wasn't really having a bad day.
The don't rhyme, but i think they sound alright together.
I just came up with words that rhyme with fail.
*they
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